Wednesday, December 11, 2013

Argumentative Draft

                                    Mirror Mirror on the wall, am I beautiful?
As I walk to the mirror and stare inside it, all I can see is fat, ugly, and not good enough. This could be your best friend, sister, brother, mother or even yourself. While growing up did you wish you looked like that model you’ve seen in the magazine or an actor/actress you seen in a movie? You wish you were as skinny as they were. Anyone can fall under the pressures society creates to be ‘perfect’. The trouble these days is that the media is constantly and greatly impacting the people to have a perfect body image, which leads to psychophysical problems such as bulimia and anorexia. This can cause many people to go to extremes in order to achieve what they perceive as the perfect body.
As mention above, bulimia and anorexia is very dangerous. Bulimia is a food disorder caused by mental insecurities. Doctors recommend that bulimic people see a psychiatrist because the illness’s symptoms, including compulsive exercise, taking laxatives, and throwing up can cause one’s body to become short on electrolytes, which is extremely unhealthy. Anorexia is a similar condition in which one loses excessive amounts of weight often by eating very little or long periods of starvation and vomiting.
From an early age we are bombarded with images and messages that reinforce the idea that to be happy and successful we must be thin. It is nearly impossible to open a newspaper or magazine, listen to the radio, shop at a mall or turn on a TV without being confronted with the message that to be fat is to be undesirable. The most frightening part is that this destructive message is reaching kids. When young people feel as though their breasts, weight or hips don’t match up to those of supermodels and actors, they feel fatally flawed. Sadly, even children of elementary school age are obsessed over their weight. To illustrate the media’s obsession with thinness, try and name 5 current female television personalities who are overweight. Did it take you a while, if so, it’s because you barely see any bigger people on the media.
According to a study from the University of Central Florida, nearly 50% of girls aged three to six were already concerned about their weight. Another research also showed that four out of five women in the U.S. are unhappy with their appearance. Many magazines create images of women that don’t really exist by using computer-modified compilations of various body parts. Many actors and musicians have admitted to struggling with eating disorders including Demi Lovato, Katie Couric, Lady Gaga, Kate Beckinsale and Kelly Clarkson.
Dr. Susie Orbach, PhD best known for being the first to raise awareness of women’s body image and eating disorders through her book Fat is a Feminist Issue tells us about how the media affects many women today. Dr. Orbach was part of of a study group at Harvard, through their studies she had found that only 2% of women felt able to say that they were beautiful despite beauty being an incredibly important category for women. Half of 16- to 21-year-old girls would consider having surgery to change the way they look.
Jean Kilbourne, who is well known for her award-winning films Killing us softly tells us about the media effects on body image. Kilbourne says that women in general only exist in a world where their bodies are constantly judged, and their worth depends on how they look. Only 5% of women have the body type that is good enough. They must be young, thin, and almost always have to have breast implants.
Besides all he bad factor that the media plays in body image, being thin and attractive can be very powerful in today’s society. Having this image can mean the difference in getting a job you want or that guy that you’ve had your eye on. Society bases a lot on first impression, which impacts our outside appearance. Therefore, to be successful, women believe that they have to have the perfect body image. Society or success aren’t the only argues why women obsess about their body image; media is one reason too.
Silvia Knobloch Westerwich, PhD, professor and graduate studies director has wrote many articles and journal on the media and body image. She has found that several women may be inspired by the images they view and become momentarily hopeful that they can improve their own body shape and possibly even achieve the same thin-ideal bodies they see in the magazines. The media can play a big role for motivation for men and women. It can be a inspiration to many. This is contradicting as many studies suggest that the media obsession with promoting ideal bodies only damages a woman’s satisfaction about their weight and their body. Westerwich said, “Women are motivated by these fitness and beauty magazines to try to attain these supposedly perfect bodies, and may even get a short-term body image boost when they start dieting.” Westerwich also mention that this stems from problems the person has within themselves rather than the media. Eating disorders are a psychological disorder, so some say the urge to eat less or purge stem from biological concepts, not the media. According to Knobloch-Westerwick the media simply cannot be the cause of 8 million people in the United States who have eating disorders. Other issues such as environments and troubled personalities seem to be labeled as contributing factors on body image and not just the media. The National Eating Disorders Association states that a contributing factor could come from problematic relationships at home with family members, and not the media.

Overall, whether you debate if the media that has a influence on body image is up to you. I personally think that the media is a big factor to body image for today’s society. It plays a big role in everyday life. I’ve seen many of my friends and even family member suffer through eating disorder or just being overly conscious of their body everyday to the extreme. I wish that the media would stop displaying ultra thin models or actress on advertisement and magazines. I want to see real people and know that they are beautiful from the inside and outside.

13 comments:

  1. I loved all of your facts. and i love the idea for this paper. Every girl at one point in their lives have compared themselves to another and have been insecure about how they look. I think though you couldve gone into the disorders themselves just a little more in your second paragraph. also dont forget work cited :) great job!

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  2. I think your essay on how media portrays women is so true. I was able to pick out your thesis statement I think in the first paragragh. This is way we as a society have such a huge problems with eating disorders. Very good job.

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  3. Good thesis to the essay felt that you stuck to it. I like that you said it could be anyone it could be you, grabs your attention.

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  4. Clear thesis statement. I like how the opening paragraph contained alot of questions for the reader. Questions always make me want to read more. I agree that the media is a huge negative influence. Thesis statement was clearly restated in the closing as well. A lot of good facts. Nice Job

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  5. I beleive your thesis statement is how girls are influenced by the media and how they should look. Since I have always been lean, I can't relate much to this topic except being on the opposite end. I like that you talk about how media is changing and full-figured women are not being discriminated against as much as before. I can't beleive that only 2% of women actually admit to feeling beautiful. This is extremely shocking to me! I want people to be themselves as well not worry so much about how they look, you will never be able to attract every person in the world- rest assured you attract many and never pay attention to the shallow people who would judge a beautiful girl solely about their weight alone. Thank You!

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  6. "mention" should be "mentioned" in the start of the second paragraph. In the 3rd paragraph at the end put a question mark after the question "did it take you a while.....". I agree that media plays a big part!

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  7. According to a study from the University of Central Florida, nearly 50% of girls aged three to six were already concerned about their weight. This is a horrible and concerning fact! These are little kids and its scary what society is teaching them as such a young age! I agree with you, the media should be showing woman of all body types. But unfortunatly I believe the media also carrys our government lies, so theres another problem too. People need to realize to not believe or want everything they see on tv, because of the lies. There were a couple grammar errors. Great thesis and lots of research. This is your best paper yet!

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  8. I was able to pick out you thesis right away. I like how you bring in the reader by saying it could be you, your friend, mother, ect. You had a lot of good research but you did not cite them in your body. This is a rough draft so I'm sure you will fix that. Good job.

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  9. The thesis is clear but have have sentence structure issues and grammatical errors. You may want to use a grammar checker software or online service to assist in sentence format. Your first paragraph has issues as well. I like your topic.

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  10. I like your title it will help pull in the reader. Your thesis is very clear, there are a few grammar errors. Make sure you remember to cite your research in the article and have a citation page.

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  11. Your thesis was easy to pick out, that media plays a large role in how women feel about their body. There was some erros that I noticed, but i'm sure you will pick them up in your final draft. I like how you asks questions of the reader, really pulls you in. Nice essay, good job

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  12. You've done quite well covering issues I didn't see any source acknowledgement or bibliography though.

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  13. Instead of having your first sentence be in first person, change it to "a woman" because then, you've drawn a picture that anyone can imagine as themselves. Directly quote some of your research and analyze that information to help flesh out your argument.

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