“It is health, that is real wealth and
not pieces of gold and silver.” Quoted by Mahatma Gandhi. Health is number one
when it comes to taking care of ourselves. So if this is the reason, why don’t
workplaces offer a fitness gym? I often question this because I currently work
at a work environment that offers a gym facility, and my employer actually pay
us three hours addition each week for just using the gym. This is definitely a
big benefactor because I notice that a lot of people whom surrounds me are really
healthy and fit.
America is known as one of the biggest
obese country in the world and the reason for that is because of our rich and
delicious fast food restaurants. I believe that if every work place in America
offers a gym facility it will be a great benefit for everyone. How many people
have an hour lunch and don’t have anywhere to go but sit around the lunchroom
or in your car? I know I do that sometimes. The gym is such a great value as it
helps me be in shape and it gives me motivation to be healthier.
In conclusion, every workplace should
have a gym because it’s a great advantage for our body, mind, and soul. Having
the gym is a place for me to release my stress. It is especially great for the
wintertime. When people are healthier, less people call in sick. If all
workplaces have gym facility available to their employees, I’m sure everyone
will feel and look a lot healthier.
I never heard of a workplace having a gym. That's awesome! You have definitely convinced me on thinking every workplace should have a gym. I think the US would be healthier if this was the case, and most Americans would want to be paid for it too. I know that was the selling point for me, sure I'll work out if you pay me haha. The thesis is very identifiable in the first paragraph. “It is health, that is real wealth and not pieces of gold and silver.” I loved this quote and agree with it completely, if you do not have your health how can you enjoy life and its riches. In conclusion, every workplace should have a gym because it’s a great advantage for our body, mind, and soul. I thought this was a great concluding paragraph sentence. I would say for the title, should all workplaces have a fitness facility? I would also say this is quoted in the second sentence. (my employer actually pay us) I would say my employer actually pays us. I always like reading your blogs, keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteYour essay really shows the illistration with all of the facts you had. Yours was great!
ReplyDeleteLarge companies do have gym and exercise equipment and if you have a flex spending account where you work you can get memberships fees from your flex pay. My past employer contributed 50$ per month to my account so I could get out of pocket expenses covered for such things.
ReplyDeleteI love the opening of your essay, that quote is so true. I am a firm believer in a healthy life style, so I can relate to this very much so. No major errors I could find. Good job on this
ReplyDeleteYour essay was great. i think a lot more people would use the gym if their work places offered them as well. The only thing i saw wrong was "country" should be "countries" other than that everything was great!
ReplyDeleteIts a great thing to have the benefit of working out. Its even better that your work supports you in doing so. You presented your facts well and back them. Good job kepp up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHow many people have an hour lunch and don’t have anywhere to go but sit around the lunchroom or in your car? I think that sentence really shows what you are trying to say in your post. I would have liked to seen an example of the obesity or the loss of work that unhealthy people create. I like the how you give examples of the people you work with and how they benefit from the gym. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteGreat use of a quote! This piece was very persuasive because of the numerous benefits you stated, not only for the employee, but also for the company/employer. Plus it raises a great question ("why don’t workplaces offer a fitness gym?") that forces the reader to think about your topic and form an opinion. A few grammatical errors, but overall very good.
ReplyDeleteYou make a very good point, I ahve many friends that also work at your place of employment, and that would be very helpful to have an hour lunch and a gym on site. Such motivation to stay fit and get healthy. I myself am actually applying for a job there, and have started to change my life style.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure having a gym should be the business's responsibility. As the US has the highest obesity rate, maybe more people should get memberships at the YMCA or other private gyms. I don't think it's a bad idea if a workplace has a gym but not a responsibility. THank you for sharing.
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